Her-Edity (Book 1) - A Slippery Slope
Near future Sci-Fi Thriller
50 Chapters - 138 Scenes - 104,096 words
Author - Jean McAuliffe
StoryCoach feedback - 58-page summary letter (18,192 words), per scene notes (9,787 words), and in text comments.
“Hi Casper, I am almost through my scenes. What a wonderful, fun journey it has been with you. I love and appreciate your comments and suggestions. I've hacked out 4 scenes- yay. However, making the story sizzle per your suggestions has added more words, but better words. At this point, I'm not worrying too much. I could always lose the Prologue as you suggested. I haven't decided yet.
Your questions and ideas made me think of other fun/horrible things to do with and to my characters. The moment I get an epiphany on how to tweak the story is the best feeling ever!
You are an amazing coach, a wonderful and thoughtful cheerleader, and always a compassionate critic.
I'll be sad when I get to my The End. I'll reread your summary pdf again and send any more comments I might have.
I am more than grateful for finding you and for your work.
Back to my scenes, Jean”
A mother with one year to live. A daughter with holo-dna technology to save her. How far down the forbidden slippery slope of Genetic Engineering will she go?
In the near future, Alyson Bernard, a recent recipient of a Ph.D. in Advanced Genomics created holographic virtual mice to revolutionize medicine. She is on the cusp of leaving for a new life and exciting career in California. Disaster strikes when her mother doesn’t recognize her with the devastating diagnosis of a fast-acting dementia.
Only one company and its manipulative CEO, Jaksan Cataan, steps up to offer hope. But her mother warns that Cataan is not to be trusted, under any circumstances.
Will Alyson refuse Cataan’s offer and sentence her mother, others like her, and their families to a wasting lonely death, or will she agree and be forced to use genetic engineering to save her?